Very interesting piece! I know its old, but you were kind to me, so I'm repaying that.
I love how you don't really know what has hurt the speaker until the very last line: "For you." This creates a nice dramatic effect which hits the reader. My interpretation is that is about someone who is in love, and it is so painful because they are not loved back or the other person deliberately hurts them. The pain is really described by how dramatic it is like "crushed to dust" and "Beaten". These are all powerful.
One line I do not like is "Like the shards of glass that I was like." It really breaks the rhythm and just sounds odd.
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