Young Writers Society

Hey Eferhilda! It's Mr. Powers here with another fun and exciting review. I'm going to be looking at this poem, titled "Smiling In The Darkness". I usually like to go stanza-by-stanza in my review, but... there are no stanzas. I don't know if this is intentional or not, but it's confusing and eye-straining in any case. If I were you, I'd go back and fix that.

I read the poem, and here's what I gathered from it: you stress the importance of perseverance, and you still smile in the face of certain tragedy. That's some pretty deep stuff right there.

There's also a problem with grammar, or punctuation, or something. I'd add a few commas here and there, and CREATE STANZAS. Once you do that, I feel the errors are going to jump out at you.

Anyway, I'm finished. I give this poem a favorable review. Enjoy yourself, and your profile picture is rather confusing.

------Powers Out-------

I found it really interesting right away that you chose to capitalize "darkness". It gives it great personification and sets the tone of the poem perfectly.

This is especially interesting to me as well because its an odd mirror for a book I'm currently reading called "Smile at Strangers." In it the woman talks about conquering the darkness, the fear, and not giving into it. I really appreciate the smiles you are giving and the inner battle you are fighting here.

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Some things that I can that you can improve on is organization. Now, I am not saying you have to, but you can organize your poem into several stanzas. Like at the part

Making me feel cold, alone and afraid
Still I smile

Cold, Alone and Afraid

Hey there! So I can totally relate to this poem in every possible way and I think that you touch a lot of peoples' hearts with this piece. Every word you use is important and adds to the meaning of the work unlike many writers who feel the need to add useless words. I like the repetition of "I smile to" because it draws the reader's attention to the meaningful parts.

Nitpicks:

I smile for others joy