Sunshine here to review.....
What a lovely poem about the moon it's simple and pretty. I wish I could review this a bit better, but it looks like I've been beat to it. I do agree with the other two, you used hope a lot and it's a bit overkill. The message in the poem was very straightforward and conveyed a very easy to understand message. Your analogies, metaphors, and similes made sense and you created really cool images. I love this part of the poem, I found it really sweet.
"Lamps to light the dark.
Wiping away a baby's tears,
Guiding an old lost family,
Giving hope to a fearing heart,
Shining light to the surrendering,
Giving hope to those who wish."
Good job! Keep on writing!
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