People often say that you are one in a million, but they’re telling you a lie. The truth is that you are on in seven billion and growing. Yes, people share traits such as race, family, and religion, but no matter how alike we are we are more different than not. We can classify ourselves in many ways but one of the most revealing is social behavior.
Social behavior is classified as introvertism or extrovertism. Before you rush and ask “But what if I’m both?” know that you have characteristics of both. Being an introvert means that you have more introverted qualities than extroverted, and it’s the opposite for extroverts.
I myself am an introvert, heavily so, and to put it simply I’ll state the truth. I prefer the company of books more than I do people and I’d rather have my Xbox controller in hand than be the life of a party. My brother on the other hand has a more extroverted disposition. He’s a talker while I’m a listener, he’s out with friends while I’m in with pen and paper. He’s a risk taker while I prefer my comfort zone. His social behavior is similar to that of Steve Jobs, Bill Clinton, and Muhammed Ali while mine is more like Bill Gates, Gandhi, and Moses.
No social disposition is better than the other, much like no religion is better than the other. We’re all different and alike, no denying that, but in the end we’re all human.
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Hello! For a short essay, this was really good.
One quick error to fix:
On should be one*
But seriously, this was very good for something so short! Your intro was a nice hook, with the casual statement that the phrase "one in a million" is a lie. You make the reader think, "Wait, what?! IT'S A LIE?!!" and then you proceed to explain why it's a lie, and everything is okay again. x)
Then you slowly ease your way into social behavoir and explain what introvertism and extrovertism is. Then you use yourself and your brother as an example and explain how you're more of an introvert, whereas he's more of an extrovert, by using this example and that example.
Overall, I think you did a great job with this.
This was SO inspirational! I am an introvert myself
Anyways, I spotted no errors, unless "Xbox" isn't spelled like "Xbox" (how you put it), but other than that everything is good!
Okay, what I really enjoyed was how you compared this to religion. Not one single religion is better than the other, just like classification. Another thing I liked was that you didn't simply state the definition of an introvert or extrovert, you said you were an introvert (explaining what you liked to do, etc) and your brother is an extrovert.
I like this essay/thingie for school, nice job!
Depending on when you have to turn this in (unless you have already and just want to see what we think here), could you tell me the parameters of this assignment? Like what kind of essay is this supposed to be, how long, could you talk about anything you wanted or did it have to be behavioral classification, was it supposed to be formal, and so on. Because I'd like to give you some feedback but for it be helpful feedback about an essay for a class, I'd like to know more about the assignment first, if I may.