Hey! Forever here with a tiny review!!
Well, this was rather a very interesting one to read. I am afraid that I didn't really get the real meaning of the story but it was pretty humorous.
Okay, so first and foremost, this seems to be a real scene not an imaginary one. So, what is the function of facebook here? From the little I got, it seemed that this girl used to talk to a person on FB. And then.... I am not at all sure but somehow that person got her address. So he came there but she didn't know that he was coming. Or maybe they knew each other in real life and in FB too but they didn't know that they were they same people because they hid their identity on FB. That can be something but I have no idea about the exact thing. Going with my own theory, I guess the person used to send her poetic lines ans she associated those with this person and asked it.
Now to the critiques. I really really feel that it should be lengthened and it should be made a lot clearer than its current state. The readers should be able to reach to a conclusion which they(at least I) couldn't. While it reads good, it doesn't convey any real sense to the readers. It feel like it's a scene taken from a large novel or a larger story and we miss what happened earlier and later.
One thing which I really liked about the story is the metaphors(that is what they are called, I guess). The person seems to be very poetic in nature and has some personality. And about the girl, I don't know what to say but she was rather surprised when he said this. That honestly didn't tell me anything good about her.
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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