I speak,not because you asked me
Not because, I need
Not because of her,not because of him
I heard the cries of your hungry minds
And those of your thirsty minds
My words inject knowledge in you minds.
But before I speak,I write
I use a pen like a needle to inject life and meaning on a piece of paper,words that cannot be silenced or unspoken.
Words which transforms into a language that the deaf can hear,and the blind can see.
Open your ears so that your mind can feed
The longer you listen,the greater the feast
You will feel like understanding has given you a kiss,and I hope you also speak
From your lips wisdom might escape,and I offer to listen
But
Right now I speak,not because you asked me,
Not because I need
Not because of her or him
But because I want to offer your mind a feast
Enjoy your feast.
You have a very good voice for poetry. I can tell that you're really feeling this. However, I have a huge nitpick for you: PUNCTUATION. It feels as though you just rushed through this because I found many a typo and many a punctuation error. There should be a space after every comma. Also, a stanza should start on every new idea.
Keep it up! I really enjoyed this poem! Thank you
Hey there! Welcome to YWS.
Biggest nitpick -- you've got a lot of punctuation errors in this! Every time you have a comma or a period, you need a space after it. Otherwise, everything looks crowded, and that's a sight for sore eyes. Plus, if you need another reason, it isn't grammatically correct.
An example --
I speak,not because you asked me
I speak, not because you asked me
I speak,not because you asked me
Not because, I need
I speak,not because you asked me to
Not because, I need to
Words which transforms into a language that the deaf can hear,and the blind can see.
From your lips wisdom might escape,and I offer to listen
But
Right now I speak,not because you asked me,
The poem had power behind it, especially in some verses like this one --I use a pen like a needle to inject life and meaning on a piece of paper,words that cannot be silenced or unspoken.
Everyone learns at their own pace.Hi Peace! And that is a great name!
I am really new on reviewing other writer's work; so I haven't yet learned to be all critical about them and point out their faults. What I can do really is admire this wonderful piece you have written.
With this poem of yours, you speak for most if not all of us, I mean the young writers here. I might as well say that this poem has been quite inspirational for me and I think that this might as well influence my own writing.
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I speak,not because you asked me
Not because, I need
Not because of her,not because of him
I heard the cries of your hungry minds
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This was really a 'feast' for me. Thank you!
first I'd like to thank you for complimenting my name,that was very kind of you. I also want to tell you how happy you've made me by saying that my poem inspired you, that is my biggest aim,as a young writer, to inspire others! Finally I'd like to thank you for taking the time to not only read my poem but also put in the effort to write a review on it, I truly appriciate it 
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