Hello! Rachel here to review.
I really admire this piece. You've seem to have put the thoughts of writers everywhere into on compact story- skillfully so, I might add.
The couple of technical errors I noticed have already been pointed out by Knight Dragon.
This passage here really spoke to me: (I've bold printed one little change I made. The same correction Knight Dragon made to another sentence.)
All of us, we have a feeling that starts everything. The feeling isn’t something we can explain, or talk about. It can only be felt, in the deepest and the darkest corners of our heart, while we sit, curled up under the bed, or behind the curtains, fighting our own mind.
These few lines here are really powerful. I think they accurately express the struggle of not quite being able to express that certain 'feeling' we get when it comes to writing, and how we sometimes just can't deal with it. Beautiful.
That's about all I have to say about it other than this:
You did an exceptional job on this piece. Keep writing.
Points: 1632
Reviews: 79
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