Hey there! Cailey here with a review as promised.
So I decided to read this one because I liked the title and saw that you didn't have tons of reviews already. So I hope this'll help.
I like the image that this poem placed in my mind. I can see someone sliding, and I like how you don't specify because the reader can imagine whatever situation he wants. (I just finished reading 13 Reasons Why, and I can imagine the main character, Hannah, writing this poem, but I can also think of friends I have that share similar sentiments.) Basically, you leave it up to the reader to apply this to his or her life in whatever way will be most meaningful, and I think that's really cool.
Along with that, I like how the title connects to that idea of the speaker just not even wanting to try anymore. It's like in the title you show a picture of someone just throwing his or her hands in the air and giving up.
The last lines are a little too ambiguous, though. (I'm not sure if that's the word I want to use...) There isn't enough around them or in them or something, but it just makes me confused. Is the speaker telling the reader to choose a side? Or is the speaker saying that he or she needs to choose? And "let's quit pretending" is also not explained enough. Give a little more information about how those two lines connect to the rest of the poem.
Otherwise, great job! I hope this review was helpful.
Cailey
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