Published November 3, 2013
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Hi, J.C. here for a review!
Okay, it's going to be hard to get 100 points with this one, but I'll try
Like Pample, I was envisioning some dark and mysterious place at the beginning, then, in the fourth line, you talk about the sun never setting. Huh? Strangely strange to be sure.
Looking at it a bit deeper than the surface, we find the oxy-moron of life. Of course, I'm sure no one else is going to think of it like this, but it's all about interpretation and perspective anyways.
This line, coupled with the others, makes me think of a bright and cheery place. The sun does that. Of course, it has a far more sadistic side and likes to fry people, (as happened to me this last week,) but in most cases, people are happy to see the sun. It means light and life.
So how could the world be dark if the sun is always shining? Good question I just asked myself.
And there's the answer. We live in a world of almost perpetual ease and convenience, at least, for those in the larger countries. Yet, still, there is perpetual anger and hate and etc. and etc. People are just downright rude.
So, in a land of milk and honey, we always end up eating crap and flies at one point or another. It's actually a very controversial subject, and one people have been deliberating on for thousands of years. Nice job
Thank you Strange!
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Heyo, Lati here to do a review for The Apple Dumpling Gang! (On my tablet!)
I really liked this poem, even though it was so short! (Of course, it had a reason to be short. Awesome job! You had 20< (Less than twenty) words!)
I couldn't find amything wrong with this poem, mainly because it was so short, and because you obviously put some time into the creation of this poem even though it may not look like it.
However, I swear you made this poem just to confuse my mind! What I mean by this is the second and forth lines:
Second: "Riddled with failure and death."
Forth: "Where the sun never sets."
The reason this is screwing with my mind is that I associated the second line with somewhere dark and sad... And when I got to the forth line, I associated it with somewhere happy! WHAT ARE YOU TRYING TO DO TO MY MIND?! xD
Overall, I really loved this poem, and I hope you keep writing (and publishing) more things for me to read!
Keep Writing and A Happy Review Day!,
~Lati <3
When someone writes a poem so short a thought pops into my head. 'How can someone put enough depth into a poem with such little words?' I believe you answered my question. Your poem was short and to the point which is what I like to see.
I found this to be the most powerful line in your piece.
All in all you've done an amazing job at packing so much into such a tiny package. Well done and happy writing!
Gorgeously beautiful!
I'll have to say I love, love, love this! It just made so much sense and fell together wonderfully. It's short, but that's part of the beauty! It just says so much in so little!
Hey there Strange!
(I wonder why you named yourself strange ._.)
Okay, on with the review:
Your short poem is really nice.
I didn't get one part though:
"The place,
Where the sun never sets."
I don't understand how the sun never sets at a place "riddled with failure and death" or where you trying to mean something else?
Nice try though!
Keep writing,
~Gigi
I was talking about the world