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beautiful style of poetry with imagination and deepness I like it

Hi there, Rebel here to review.

I loved the oodles and oodles of imagery that you used in this poem. I thoroughly enjoy when poets use imagery, and especially when they talk about autumn. I think you nailed the imagery.

The only nitpick I have is this:

"Leaves crunching; the squirrel skips away;": It feels awkward when you use the two semi colons here. I'd change the first one to a comma and then leave the second one. I feel like it's look better that way.

Overall, I think you did an excellent job with your poem. Keep writing!

Hello! This is yubbies21, A squire looking to accomplish her 10th Green Room Review to become a knight.

There are many creative words and phrases used in this poem, giving it fresh and unusual imagery. In places, it is very simple, making it all the more beautiful!

It has a very smooth flow, unblemished and perfect. I read it over and over, combing for something to be improved, but you have done a perfect job yourself and there is nothing I would ever change about it.

My favorite line is a simple yet powerful description:

flecks of ash against the orange.

Wow, this is a great poem! Your diction is very vivid and I can almost feel what you must have felt at certain times during the scene because you expressed everything so clearly. This is extremely well-written and a very good representation of what a poem should look like and sound like. Your words really spoke to me and I have nothing negative to say since it was so beautiful.

This poem is beautiful. No more said. To me, it perfectly captures the essence of autumn, and that makes me stop and re-read over and over again.

Flow:

The flow in this is uninterrupted, and when I say it aloud, I find not a line that is slightly awkward on the tongue. For a poem, this is very important, and you have done it perfectly.

Vocabulary:

The word choices in this are full of power and emotion. They are simple, but sometimes simplicity is the best choice possible, and this is one of those cases. Also, the simple colours. You have named them as they are, "red", "pink", "yellow", and not complicated shades. This, to me, portrays a meaning of innocence. If this is what you were going for, then congratulations!

Anything else

I see no flaws whatsoever in this poem, and that makes it all the more pleasurable to read. It was really enjoyable, so thank you for this amazing piece.

Nightwolf