Published October 6, 2013
I would recamend listening to the troll song on youtube.
I saved the world
I really did!
Nothing special about me,
just me and my luck.
Along with a few other things.
But the point is,
I saved the world!
Yes I did!
My friends tried to prank me,
but it went wrong,
and almost destroyed the world!
But luckily I saved it!
With a push of the button
and a couple of clicks!
I saved the world
I saved the world
I saved the-wait, what?
NO, I'm as normal as you.
Why did the evil people-
Whoa, hold it right there bub.
my friends are NOT evil.
OOOHHHHH!
Oopies.
Guess I forgot to mention:
I'm talking about Minecraft.
My friends were trying to prank me,
but they failed.
It was a good prank.
'May death rain upon them'
Yeah, they nuked it.
But I saved the-hey,
where are you going?
Trollololol. TrololollolOOOOOLLLOOOO!
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Hey there, Buzz here to review!
What a funny poem you had here, the ending in particular was very good. I was wondering how you saved the world, when I saw Minecraft, that was hilarious. As much as i loved it, there is always room for improvement. This will be a short review because there's not really much to say.
I felt like you used too many exclamation marks, i understand you were creating emphasis, but it got too much at certain points. Especially when they were used in following lines.
I saved the world!
Yes I did!
and almost destroyed the world!
But luckily I saved it!
I enjoyed the slight insanity to this, but oh well, it was great.
-Buzz
The Messenger Knight here to review for the KotGR.
So first off I was going to upset because you weren't telling me anything about how you saved the world . . . then I got to the last few lines. Very good twist there on the end. I should've guessed it, but maybe because I thought this was gonna be some super unrealistic poem then I wasn't expecting the twist. Anyway . . . sorry with the babbling.
I feel some exclamation points are in order after these lines. Also in your first line you need a period at the end.
Now THAT was a funny line.
Are you missing and s here?
Your very last line really sealed the deal. Awesome job.
Keep it up!
Hi there! A quick review for you!
Okay, so firstly I had to stop laughing. Good one!
My first thought was—biiiig block of text. And there's almost nothing worse than a reader taking a look at your poem and closing the page because it "looks daunting".
So break it up into stanzas, not necessarily of equal amounts of lines, just where one subject ends and another begins.
Then … you used a dash in the second-last line. But you used a hyphen to make it. Just press Alt Shift - to make a lovely Em-dash. Also, the letter after the dash should not be capitalized. Keep it lower-case.
Oh, and before I go: great line!
Made my day.
barefootrunner
Haha, that was funny.
Don't tell anyone, but I felt like trolling and this came out of nowhere. xD But I think it's the best poem that I've ever written.