Happy Review Day!
Beautiful essay you have here, well written. It was a pleasure to read, my dear! I think you did an excellent job of portraying your dream and goal with many examples. While it was really short, even for an essay (normal high school standards are 5 paragraphs), I felt you summed it all up into two well-detailed paragraphs. Nice work!
Yes, those punctuation errors.. they make my eyes bleed. It was hard to read this, but I managed, but some people don't have the dedication or the patience to read through it all! Spaces. Are. Needed. After every punctuation mark (, . ? !), there must, must be a space. Otherwise, you are grammarically incorrect. Please go through and edit this ASAP! This work is too beautiful to have such imperfections.
Other than that, nice job! It was a (struggling) pleasure to read.
For Team YWSDBG,
~Iggy
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