Hello, here to review (I hope I'm not annoying you with all the reviews).
This was a great poem, I really liked it. The beginning was intriguing.
I met someone special, who looked a lot like you,
And then a world of color came into my view.
This is what made me decide to read the whole poem. Especially the second verse. I like how you describe it as if your life wasn't that important until you met that person, and then everything took color.
But, it wasn’t till the sun came out that I now was sure,
That the grey world I thought I knew, I never knew before.
This part is a bit confusing. It wasn't until after a few times rereading it that I understand (or think I do). I don't know what makes me see it that was, but I think that structured differently it might be a little easier to understand and help the flow of the story. You could say, for example:
But, it wasn’t till the sun came out that I now was sure,
That I'd never really known the grey world I thought I knew.
I especially like the ending.
Has my world of color gone back to boring grey?
I was answered by the dawn of a colorful new day.
I love this part, because you make the reader think that the color wouldn't last, or maybe it had never even happened at all. And then the way you deliver the news that there is, in fact, still color, is a super good ending to the story. Beautiful!
There weren't really any mistakes, spelling or grammatical, and the poem was beautiful.
The views I express here are my own, and you are the writer and it is your style, so take my suggestions as seriously as you want.
Congratulations again and keep writing, I'll be looking forward to it.
-AlfonsoF, member of the Apple Dumpling Gang
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