Young Writers Society

I love this, though it is sad. Curiosity strikes us all, but its up to us to decide how we deal with it. Everybody has about fixed this poem, though I will say what I thought, though I am guessing its already there. You need to space out this poem a little better, so
that way the lines don't look too long. And on the seventh line it says : Curiosity be can horrible,

I am guessing you meant "Curiosity, can be horrible"

This is a really great poem, and with a little editing, it will be perfect! Good job. And by the way, I follow anyone I review, so consider yourself followed. You are a great writer, and with effort, you will go far, I can almost guarantee it!

Hi, Spark here to review!

Aw, this is whimsical! I love the adorableness of it, but I also love that it brings a different light on some rather serious topics. The format however, is kind of chunky. I would suggest changing it a little to make it easier to read.

For example,

It also killed a small child, who simply wanted to see more than her back yard.
It ruined the life of a 15 year old girl, now she is pregnant, and her life is much too hard.

It also killed a small child,
who simply wanted to see more than her back yard.
It ruined the life of a fifteen year old girl, and now she is pregnant
and her life is much to hard.

Hello there here is a jordin or a Jonathan with a review I really hope it helps you out.

Well you can be right in some cases but in most it is not but this is not a court of justice.

OK good work on this but I thought it was strange that it could kill a cat and another thing you could cut out the YES in the second line.

Really good work though.

Keep writing and good luck.

Until later good bye.

~Jon~

I did make a mistake on the 7th line. There is suppose to be a "be" after the word "Curiosity"

Overall, it feels like a solid start. Line seven, you're missing a word, I'm assuming a "be". Also, I'm not sure is you need the "Because," at the start of line two.
I like how you don't use a rhyme scheme on the first two lines. The difference makes them stand out a bit more to me. Also, your straightforward style is something i can appreciate.