Hello Meth. Jordin here with a review for you and my team the greatest team 'Hot sauce' and it must prevail.
Hope this little review helps you out some buddy.
'Do you weep for me to here?' This needs some work it is wrong.Do you weep for me to hear?
And another thing I thing it is a wise idea to make your paragraphs 3-4 lines long.
And 'breaking the fortress wall' would be a better name for this piece of poetry.
And why will the walls crumble down into the dust Meth?
Good job.
Keep writing and good luck.
I hope this helps.
~Jon~
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