Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well...this was a very interesting story to say the least...I am loving this concept here...let's see where this goes..also looks like a killer cliffhanger there at the end of this.
Anyway let's get right to it,
I don't think that you know me; at least not yet. Most of you don't know me for a while, but don't worry, not knowing me is a good thing. A good thing in the fact that you haven't moved to another universe, or changed your status recently -what I mean by changed your status, is the transition between where you are now (living and breathing) to something very different; where there's only one way to put it. Dead.
Well...that's a very interesting style of intro...although considering where I come from...well...check my profie page I guess...if you ever see this that is.
I won't go to the trouble of introducing myself; not because I'm being rude. You just don't want to know my name. Knowing my name isn't the best thing -what you want to know is what I'm talking about, well most people swoon, pant, and beg me to take them back, back to their home. Not because I caught them; I would never do a thing like that, but that's almost metaphorically what I did. Infact, I came down from my perch, when the time was right; and carried their soul up to heaven. When they get up there, the idea of heaven shifts and changes; what it really is, is a massive database of all the people who have come here, or at least visited. Most think of pink fluffy clouds, golden gates, colonnades... I could go on about what they think of -all of them inaccurate and filth. Ironic that I think it's filth, when really this was your idea of perfect harmony; the resting place not just for you, but for many of your loved ones.
Oooh...I have a feeling this point of view here is going to be really interesting going forward here....definitely starting off by making some really interesting statements here. Well...I am definitely excited to see what this story has to offer here going forward...
They cry, point out the obvious, call out to the ones they loved on the floor -underneath them- 'where are you?', 'I still love you.' Hearing this for the first time, you feel keen to turn them back, save their lives, only for them to clumsily lose it again. Not me, not me, oh no, not me. Only once have I saved a man from this, this realisation that they are never going back to their loved ones; just in time for tea. Standing there, all alone on that stormy afternoon; I watched him cry out to the wind spiraling above him, wanting his friends back, and for good. He wished away for the storm to pass, and the warm skies to return. Out of nowhere a tree was torn from it's roots by the force of the swirling wind; branches and roots flailing about like mad. Frozen, and not just by the icy horizontal rain, the fear that cloaked him.
Well...that was a really powerful description there....I can definitely almost see the chaos here as it happens and it sounds beautiful...ahh...this is just some really good imagery that you're creating here.
Tearing my eyes away from this scene, I waited for the swooning, the cries, and the calling out to his loved ones... none came. Just panting quickly and softly, he faded into my view; his only words, "Send me back," He paused waiting,"I know where I am, I saw where I was going before I even knew that thing was coming towards me, now, send me back."
"No," I said calmly, watching the pink fluffy clouds turn into grey mist.
"If you can't send me back, then at least tell me why.
Well...that's someone that knows a lot about what's just about to happen considering he just died probably moments ago...welll...it is quite a fun concept though...just me imaging pink clouds disappearing is hilarious at least.
Softly chuckling to myself, if only you knew, I thought to myself, if only you knew the harsh reality of what you have just faced."I cannot send you back, but I can offer you time, and a great many other things."
"Then what can you give me? You say you can give me a great many other things, none of my family fits in with a great many other things. None of what I want fits in with many other things. So tell me now; what do I do?"
"Wait."
Wow this person sure knows how to ask a question...wow...getting this being all tongue tied here and asking for time....well...well..well..quite the cliffhanger we have here...I will certainly be looking into that second part then...that much is certain.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall this was quite a fun story to read. I would definitely review that second part as soon as possible...well then....until next time....that's all I gotta say.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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