Hello! I'm just going to break this down and write my thoughts.
I am holding on
to the desperate sun-
So I understand that the sun is setting, but the next parts seem to be connected to the sun's desperation...
watching clouds roll away
as the wind starts to sway.
Why does the sun care if clouds roll away and the wind starts to sway? Nice rhyming, though, it sounds really whimsical.
The moon is a lamp
to this world so damp;
I really like the idea of the moon being a lamp.
there is night coming quick,
and my heart feels sick
as I try to hold fast
with the sun as my cast,
hiding my wounds.
I'm just wondering, why does the sun hide her wounds? I'm sorry; this must have so many hidden meanings and I'm asking about everything. Ah well.
Still, the darkness comes soon
and the sky turns to black,
and I am waiting in the crack.
This last bit is really fantastic. Great imagery.
Lovely poem!
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