Hey Mandrake!
Alright, time for another one of your wacky short stories where you write crazy, weird stuff which I swear is only written to make me spill coffee on my keyboard. Through nose.
Overall, this is quite a funny little short. It's written with a lot of clear goals in mind. Taking the weird and stupid characteristics of a certain person and exaggerating them. In this case, obviously, Michael Bay. Who you have already successfully poked fun at in the past. 
I like it better here though. You upped the ante and he appears almost like a Looney Tunes character here, as he's yelling at people and demanding things. Heck, at one point he is even shouting through a megaphone. Man, do I love that.
However, I'm not sure I'm understanding the framing around this though. As I read through this, I felt as if we started off in one setting but then we were suddenly in another one. I've actually felt this before in one of your stories, where it reads as a narrator is narrating a story, and then suddenly he is pulled out of that and he is a character in this other story.
Here, you start off the story with Tetris.
The year: 2199
Actually, I'm first going to assume that this is in the whole 'Tetris universe' part of the story, as Michael Bay would thankfully be dead at this point. Although I'm sure he'd have technology to keep him alive. Or cloning, like in 'The Boys from Brazil'! (Where they clone Hitler, very similar to Bay)
Anyhow, we start off with Tetris. I quite like this part. It has a lot of good Tetris puns that I enjoy, and some humorous mentions of a therapist.
Because I AM a puzzle piece
I particulary enjoyed this line.
See, these people ca-
At one point though, we are suddenly abrupted from this story as Michael Bay seemingly just walks in and ends it.
"But, you need to stick to the original story to make a good story." I reply.
I can only assume that the whole opening was the writer of the story? And he was...acting it out? I guess?
However, Bay says this at some point thought. 'Have you guys randomly appear'.What I'm going to do is rewrite the script. Have you guys randomly appear, have extreme fights with no plot,
Is... is the writer an actual Tetris piece? That has... somehow written a screenplay for Michael Bay?
Alright, aside from this confusion about the story itself, I really love it. After this part, you continue doing some funny jabs at Bay throughout the rest of it.
"Yes! I am going to produce this!" Michael screams.
This is probably my favorite part in the entire piece.
And lastly, the TMNT reference is golden.
There's really not much else to bring up. It's a pretty short work. It's a bit confusing at times, which a lot of your works are, and there's aren't any particular grammatical errors I could bring up. Your grammar has improved big time. I can only assume all those reviews have done you good.
Keep it up, Mandrake.
Cheers
Birkhoff
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