Oh, wow! I love it, I love it, I love it! It's beautiful, great vocabulary, and has enough emotion in it to be a good poem. It might be a bit repetitive; but upon the topic of fire, this is almost always a problem. However, the different body parts you compared made it less repetitive.
However, I don't think this stanza is neccesary; it just lengthens the poem and is rather irrelevant to what else you are saying.
I watched the fire burn,
engulfing me inside.
I loved your ending. Very interesting! Keep writing!
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