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I'm personally a huge fan of using nature in metaphor with emotions, it's just calming. Other than being beautiful, this makes a nice point about lost love. One nitpick
"tears wept by lovers lost forgotten-" Why is there a dash after this? It connects to while, or in use like a comma or semi-colon. Either way I think you don't need it. Since you start a new stanza after this it seems strange to linger from the last.
Happy writing and have a nice day!
~Purple
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