Heya, Lost! Casanova here to do another review for you!
Anyway, the first thought I had whenever I read this was,"Um, okay then... help." A lot of your stories and poetry makes me think this at first, but let's get into the room.
Now, the first thing I'd like to say is that this poem seems a tad bit rambly. Like, you have your imagery(stolen feet I guess), and yet it's going all over the place fast. Pace yourself, and let whatever story you're trying to tell unfold. Don't jump into anything really fast like this. take your time to think and play it out. Anyway, onward with the review.
The next thing I'd like to say about this is I lacked any connection to the poem what so ever. It's more of a fun poem it seems like, but all I'm getting out of it is the rambly,"MY FEET," deal and honestly it's a bit annoying. Try something less rambly, more connecting with the reader. Anyway, onward.
The next thing is the repetition. Throughout most of the poem you're basically just repeating that your feet have been taken, so that gets a little annoying to read after a while as well.
Anyway, that's all I have to say on this one and I hope it helped. Keep on doing what you're doing and keep on keeping on.
Sincerely, Matthew Casanova Aaron
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