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Portrait in Twilight: The Butterfly



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Wed May 03, 2006 5:04 pm
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Portrait in Twilight: The Butterfly - An Exercise in Surreality: 23 April, 2006

...:Inspired by Genesis' 'Harlequin':...


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The God spoke to the butterfly from his golden bridge on the World Edge, calling down to it through the sky. The butterfly heard His voice as it swam in the light of the sunset over the ocean, and soared abruptly upwards, up, up, out of the gentle, silvery splashing of the sea, up into the clouds.

I’m here, it called out to Him in the purple-gold brilliance. I’m here.

They watched together, the butterfly and the God, as the light slowly slipped down behind His palace at the very end of the world, high up in the slowly darkening clouds. Last slivers of light peeked up over the horizon, throwing themselves like darting, golden birds against the surreal, domed beauty of Heaven. The God looked at the butterfly and smiled as the moon sneaked up in a shrouded pale gleam.

I didn’t know colors like that existed, the butterfly told Him.

From far below, the sea swished and swirled against itself, singing expressly to Him and the butterfly, a whispering symphony conducted by the moon. The Aeorinthyne Sea, the sea of all the world, it was, and the only thing it cared to sing for was the God. Tonight though, because the God had asked, it sang for the butterfly instead, the little fluorescent bit of sky that billowed its wings gently in time to the music.

Do you like it? the waves swish-swirled up to their butterfly. We really hope you like it.

The butterfly did. He flew down from the golden bridge and skimmed just over the waves’ tossing heads, throwing little bits of its light down to them so that they would have something to play with when they were done making music.

Thank you, they called up to the little, happy butterfly as it zipped up to the misty ethereality of the clouds. Thank you, they called up to the God, because after all there wouldn’t even be a butterfly without Him.

There were moon shadows on the golden bridge at the World Edge when the butterfly got back, and the God was looking down into the pitching, rocking waves, thinking.

What is it? the butterfly asked, making a little loop in the air, still thrilled because of the very special music that was just for it. The waves echoed it, and so did the moon, echoing, echoing amongst the subtle, surreal, domed beauty of Heaven and the World Edge. Is something wrong?

He was still looking down into the waves of the Aeorinthyne Sea as they chimed up to him, What is it? What is it?

“I’ve made a world of Sea,” He said to the butterfly. “And though the Sea is a beautiful thing to have made, it needs more.”

The butterfly wondered what it could be, letting his wings billow slightly in the fresh breeze that the night sent to them.

More butterflies? it asked finally, in all seriousness, watching intently the little periwinkle shapes his wings made on the golden bridge in the moonlight.

“What good are more butterflies when the World has you?” the God asked it, leaning on the railing and smiling a bit, even though the butterfly couldn’t see what was funny. It looked intently at the God, along with the waves, the moon and the night and it pondered.

More fish? the Sea whispered breathlessly up at Him. Maybe?

“No.” The God leaned on the bridge railing at the edge of the World and stared down, down into the darkness of the waves.

Angels? asked the moon, because the God had already told them of His plans. The moon had since been waiting with fierce impatience to see the anticipated angels.

“Not yet. It’s too soon for angels.”

Animals other than fish? the Sea asked, dredging for a suggestion worthy of His approval, because although he was a kind God, they all wanted to please Him. The God heard it and a moment later laughed, and the waves whispered excitedly amongst themselves.

“My dear waves,” he called down to them, leaning over the rail. “How am I to make animals that walk on water?”

The waves found that they didn’t know, though they could tell that He already had an answer. It seemed like a very simple question, but they pondered amongst themselves and they remained puzzled. The butterfly couldn’t think of the answer either, so it just hovered in the breeze at His shoulder and waited for Him to answer the question for them all.

The God opened the rippling curtain at the end of the bridge and went down through it into Heaven. He took the great jeweled spear that leaned upright against His throne and came back out again to the World Edge with one step, for the steps of the God are long and the butterfly trailed faithfully behind him the whole way.

Land? the moon asked finally, staring at the polished wood and the silver hand-grip, where the engraving was nearly worn away.

The God smiled at it and suddenly He wasn’t on the bridge anymore, He was in, on and amongst cloud, with the little transparent purple butterfly right there beside Him. He thrust down through the clouds into the Sea with His spear and the wind flew up and around the shaft bringing waves with it, throwing the God’s hair out around His shoulders and sending the butterfly in a little loop
from its force. The Sea gazed in awe as the shining, wet tip of the spear went up, up, and all of the little droplets fell down, down into the Sea. The wind blew them far across the Aeorinthyne, the Sea of the World, and as they fell, the little droplets became land, masses of green glory in a swishing, swirling bed of blue just as the sun rose again and marked the arrival of the second day of the
butterfly’s life and the lives of all the rest of them.

Man and vegetation followed the little crystalline droplets into the Sea, man evolved and marked out continents and eventually forgot about the God. They made war against each other, holy wars and wars for land and food and space, and never once did they look up, up, and actually see the golden bridge in the sky, and the God that held council with His angels at the very edge of the world.

Man made chemical wars after that, made weaponry that could kill instantly and burn entire cities to cinder. Famine and Plague ran wild in the streets of the cities, and the Death followed in their wake, tormenting man with delight. The God saw it all but did not intervene, for though he was a loving God, the Death also had a right to the world.

The Sea that He had created was explored, marked, charted, polluted and fished. Man made music, loud and dissonant in the blaring of horns and the shouting, screaming, clanking, whistling, ringing of everyday life, until none cared to hear the Sea’s songs anymore, even at night, while the moon conducted its symphonies for the pleasure of the angels.

The God saw all of it, millions of years later, and He saw that some of it was good, as He stood alone in the shadow of His hall in gold-domed, invisible Heaven. He sank down, tired, into His throne, and took a deep breath, listening for the Sea’s song. And even though most men forgot about Him, never knew the butterfly and never once heard the Sea sing, the animals and the tides still knew, and He still watched over the World’s people from His bridge, and kept them all safe.


It came at night, a forgotten butterfly dancing along on the edge of the dawn and the light, its iridescent purple wings fluttering like shards of transparent glass amongst the crystal, thin-veined leaves. Turquoise light shone through the stained glass wings, over-lapping to dark blue, casting itself into spangled patterns on the darkening trees. The sun went down slowly, giving the butterfly jewels of light with which to adorn its wings, as the butterfly flew up, up out of the darkening glade and into the clouds above.

I’m here, it called up, into the sky at the very edge of the world. I’m coming.

So it was. And so it had been, since the beginning of time.
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Wed May 03, 2006 11:28 pm
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It was good, but a little too sureal. It was sort of weird.
If there aren't animals and stuff, why is there a butterfly?
Other than that, I thoguht it was good. Keep up the good work. :smt059
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Wed May 03, 2006 11:30 pm
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Because, silly, it's a magical butterfly.

They don't need to land.

(Okay, there was no reason to have a butterfly, but I loved the image and they say write whatever you like. I felt that the story needed a butterfly. Because I'm not entirely normal. Consider it an endeavor into the surreal.) ;)
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Thu May 04, 2006 7:34 am
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I didn't think this was too surreal at all. I love that you made it all so simple as a butterfly and his innocence, and to give him so much power. You've summarised the human race as a foreign species, and made us look like children instead of the superior beings we think ourselves to be. This was lovely.

I do think you need a new title though.
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Thu Sep 07, 2006 7:18 pm
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Agreed... *new title edited*
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Thu Oct 05, 2006 11:40 pm
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I loved it. It gave me a special, tingly feeling inside, like the kind you get sitting in front of a gentle fire on a winter night, with the snow falling slowly outside and the tame flames warming your face...yeah, that kind of feeling. Just out of curiosity, what do you believe? I mean, about God and the creation of the world and whatnot? You can PM me, or not if it's none of my bussiness. Just wondering.
The story was lovely. I really, really like it. It made me happy.
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Fri Oct 06, 2006 12:35 am
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Wow, that gave me the chills. The good kind, I mean. That was a really great story! I think that it was the perfect balance between surreal and reality and how you related it to the world today. I cannot express how much I totally love this story. It's really deep. :D
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Sat Oct 07, 2006 8:57 pm
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I liked it. It's different then other things that I'm used to reading. It was a little confusing at the beginning but after I read more I got it.
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Sun Oct 08, 2006 9:33 pm
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Aww... you guys rock. ^_^

gyrfalcon wrote:I loved it. It gave me a special, tingly feeling inside, like the kind you get sitting in front of a gentle fire on a winter night, with the snow falling slowly outside and the tame flames warming your face...yeah, that kind of feeling. Just out of curiosity, what do you believe? I mean, about God and the creation of the world and whatnot? You can PM me, or not if it's none of my bussiness. Just wondering.
The story was lovely. I really, really like it. It made me happy.



My belief? Convoluted - a non-Catholic Ukrainian Byzantine Catholic. I seem to be in the throes of indecision.

Thank you all, for the beautiful comments. :)
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Wed Oct 11, 2006 6:10 pm
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DD!!!!!! OMG, that was gorgeous. Simply gorgeous. I loved the imagery, and I have a soft spot for pieces that are about innocence and child-like stuff, because, well, that's kinda what I'm like! I swear, the only word to describe this piece is gorgeous. I loved it!!!!!!! You should seriously submit this for publication somewhere...GORGOUS I'm tellin' ya, GORGEOUS!!!!!!! :D

Wiggy ;)

P.S. I love butterflies and tingly feelings! :lol:
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Wed Oct 11, 2006 9:19 pm
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Really? Gorgeous? :razz:

Aw, you're too sweet, Wiggy. I'm really glad you liked it. ^_^

Heh, and I already submitted for publication... got a rejection slip informing me that it was too surreal. Oy.
  





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Wed Oct 11, 2006 9:23 pm
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Submit it somewhere else!!!! Gorgeous, I tell ya, gorgeous! :D

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Sat Oct 14, 2006 2:40 am
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Mmm...that was really really good! You know in the beginning when it started with a butterfly I was like...this is gonna be corny lol. But then as I read farther I really liked it, it has a certain innocence and beauty about the story. If you simplified everything and told all the details in pictures it could make an amazing children's book. And I'm very serious about that! It really could! It gave you that special good tingly feeling, when you just know someting is right. Great job dreamy! :wink:
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Fri Oct 27, 2006 2:52 pm
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Thanks Aero. ^_^
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Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:06 am
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This was very sweet and mystical DD. I loved all of your analogies and your descriptions were done very nice. I didn't think it was too surreal at all, I though there was just the right amout of everything and you did the time interval very well. I think this is the first thing I've actually read of yours and by no means was I dissapointed. Lol, looks like I'll have to venture into your style more offten. Great choice of vocabulary, that was also very nicely done.


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