Young Writers Society

I am me
In this vast world of uncertainties;
I stay me
Watching time float around me, and everything cease with rapid ease
I breath me
Wanting to fight, but never knowing how;
I am silent me.


You are you.
In the vast world of possibilities;
You stay you
Taking in all life has to offer, and never failing to cease every offer.
You breath you
Always fighting, never backing down;
You are extraordinarily you.


I am lost
Never knowing what I want, or when I want it
I envy you
You seem to have everything figured out - AND even the simplest of things
I want to be you
Knowing what I want and going straight for it
But I am me, silent me.


Maybe someday it will all make sense
For the hopeless and the hopeful
Maybe someday we will all rise
And reminisce about what was, and what was not
But until then;

I stay me
Undecided, confused old me

And you stay old you
Ambitious, outspoken you

But don't count me out just yet-
Our future afterall, is still - UNDECIDED.

I really liked this poem! There was a minor typo in the third stanza.

Never knowing what I what (want), or when I want it

I didn't get the third line in the third stanza, I get it at first but no the second part,

-AND even the simplest things

Are you saying he has even the simplest things figure out? It might just be me, I'm not great at poetry, or interpreting it. I still liked the point in this poem! What I got from it is that Me feels a bit down and dejected because You seems to have everything working out for him, but in the end he still has hope because the future is undecided. This was awesome! I loved it, and I hope to see more hopeful poetry like this out there!

Hello! Your poem is quite fascinating. I like your ideas here about 'The Me and the You that Hope'. The title is perfect for it. And the way you've differentiated between 'Me' and 'You' is pretty neat.

LindsayG wrote:Watching time float around me, and everything cease with rapid ease

Sentences like these catch the readers attention so good job on that. Once I started reading, I didn't get bored like I do most of the times because the message in the poem is conveyed flawlessly. However, I did detect one tiny mistake,

LindsayG wrote:And reminsce about what was, and what was not

It's reminisce. On the whole, you're poetry is awesome. And do keep it up. I don't know how such great ideas flow through your head. =P It takes me hours just to think of something good to write.