Young Writers Society

I am like the dunes in the deserts
Beneath the wind I shift and change,
I twist and turn, new dunes rise, old ones fall,
but in the end, it is still sand and nothing more.

I am both a demonslayer and a trickster of Humanity
I am Transcendant and I am Damned
I am loved and I am hated,
but in the end, I am a work of art not a mockery.

I dance on a lane made of silk and lace
on the fence between light and shadow
I am a coward and a hero.
I am an Apostle and a Doomsayer,
but in the end, I am a bringer and not a taker.

I wield power, and I watch it dissaper between my fingers.
I am a destroyer and a creator
I am a spawn and a child of the stars
but in the end, I am only Human, not a God.

Loved the first stanza, great metaphor. I don't think the ... (there's a word for that, but it escapes me at the moment) was needed in the last line or the last line in the first stanza. Even so, "but in the end, it is still sand and nothing more..." is definitely my favourite line. Good work.

thx a bunch Matt. Im still a noob at poetry. lol

Yeah i agree, The first stanza is tres belle! And yes, take out those elipses(?) in the last line, they aren't necessary. For someone new at poetry, you're not too shabby! Better than me anyway, but i aint hard to beat !

Loved it. I only have a few criticisms in the last stanza:

I wield power, and I watch it dissaper between my fingers. << disappear
I am a destroyer and a creator
I am a spawn and a child of the stars << remove the word spawn. PLEASE. **shudders**
but in the end, I am only Human, not a God.

Bravissimo! Encore! You're good. The best newbie poet I've ever met, anyways. Keep it up!

Drop all capitalisations in the poem until "God" and the effect will work better (well, use capitals for 'I', obviously).