Frozen lakes and sugar cakes

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xGraceex
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Fri Oct 10, 2008 10:20 pm
xGraceex says... · Fri Oct 10, 2008 10:20 pm
lol thanks :D :P
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DarkAngle11
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Mon Oct 13, 2008 1:01 am
DarkAngle11 says... · Mon Oct 13, 2008 1:01 am
Very nice, and funny. I loved it! Didn't understand the "green ketchup" but oh well. Again good job, loved it, and yea..that's about it.. Bye!
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CarryOutJazzy
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Tue Oct 14, 2008 11:38 am
CarryOutJazzy says... · Tue Oct 14, 2008 11:38 am
Aww, this poem is so cute! It is byfar one of the 'happiest' poems I've seen so far.

I couldn't see anything wrong with it, besides the lack of punctuation.
Other than that, you did perfect. I'm not a professional or anything,
so there were probably a few things I didn't catch.
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beyond the mask
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Fri Oct 24, 2008 3:37 pm
beyond the mask says... · Fri Oct 24, 2008 3:37 pm
it's reallly cute and all but i didn't really like it...
don't take it persinaly but it seems to me that you just have taken words and made them rhyme :S

emmm...i don't know, it could be better, in my opinion.

shabat shalom :D have a nice weekend
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zalarus
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Fri Oct 24, 2008 3:48 pm
zalarus says... · Fri Oct 24, 2008 3:48 pm
a refreshingly cheerful poem. however, i agree with 'beyond the mask'... it just seemed like a lot of rhyming words. not a lot of purpose behind it. don't let me discourage you though... keep on writing.
-zalarus
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You sound like a hillbilly,
We want folk singers here.
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Theodorable
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Thu Oct 30, 2008 6:22 pm
Theodorable says... · Thu Oct 30, 2008 6:22 pm
I LOVE THIS ONE! :smt060 it is sooooooo sweet. It captures the childhood things and pairs them with things from adulthood. It flows and rhymes perfectly. A job well done. :smt038 Keep up the good work! :smt023 And as always, keep writing! :smt024
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