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backgroundbob
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Sun Apr 23, 2006 1:11 pm
backgroundbob says... · Sun Apr 23, 2006 1:11 pm
easter

but when I added the salt, I thought
"my first boiled egg at home alone"
and knew it might not be alright

perhaps I'll burn my fingers;
just so there's something to remember
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Sun Apr 23, 2006 1:24 pm
zell says... · Sun Apr 23, 2006 1:24 pm
Thats good i liked the ending that was cool, you could change it abit maybe but i don't know exactly what needs changing
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Sun Apr 23, 2006 5:48 pm
Dream Deep says... · Sun Apr 23, 2006 5:48 pm
Pretty cool. I like to think I got all of that but what I got from it might not be at all what you meant. Chrystos Voskres 8)
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Sun Apr 23, 2006 10:11 pm
Prosithion says... · Sun Apr 23, 2006 10:11 pm
I liked it a lot, but i'm not sure you meant what I think you meant. Happy After Easter. :D
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Fri May 05, 2006 11:40 pm
backgroundbob says... · Fri May 05, 2006 11:40 pm
Well, thank you all; I forgot all about this little piece (an interesting one to come back to...), so ta muchly for taking the time to read it. Appriciated.
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Sat May 06, 2006 2:39 am
IceCreamMan says... · Sat May 06, 2006 2:39 am
I like it. A lot. There really isn't anything I can think of changing. It was short and sweet. Kinda reminded me of Emily Dickinson because of how short and to the point it was. Good job!
“Clementine: This is it, Joel. It’s going to be gone soon.
Joel: I know.
Clementine: What do we do?
Joel: Enjoy it.”
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