On the Eve of my Sixteenth Birthday: Ode to Winter

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Happy Birthday Brad!
I liked this, it was honestly a very beautiful piece. You never sieze to amaze me.




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TBR: Did you mean cease? lol

*Sigh* Emo the Brad. I mean, Brad the Emo. No, not really you haven't got there--yet :P lol.
But honestly, I loved it. It was a poem about you and not someone else too which I really liked..it really focused on what was going on in your head and you don't do that much. I would say this would go better in the Lyric section but now that I think about it it would fit in Narrative and Dramatic as well soo I guess it might as well stay here.

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when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.



'This must be Thursday,' said Arthur to himself, sinking low over his beer. 'I never could get the hang of Thursdays.'
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