the fright of real tears...

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Very cool.

Except for the first two lines: not working. Change 'em or get rid of 'em.
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"you know tomorrow will yield a better yesterday
and the fright of real tears is the only feeling you have
right before you fall asleep."

I wasn't liking it much until the last stanza which is GREAT. If we still had the star thingy I'd give you five just because of the last stanza!
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.



People say I love you all the time - when they say, ‘take an umbrella, it’s raining,’ or ‘hurry back,’ or even ‘watch out, you’ll break your neck.’ There are hundreds of ways of wording it - you just have to listen for it, my dear.
— John Patrick, The Curious Savage