the fright of real tears...

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Sam
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Mon Jul 18, 2005 3:31 am
Sam says... · Mon Jul 18, 2005 3:31 am
Very cool.

Except for the first two lines: not working. Change 'em or get rid of 'em.
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Chevy
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Mon Jul 18, 2005 4:37 pm
Chevy says... · Mon Jul 18, 2005 4:37 pm
"you know tomorrow will yield a better yesterday
and the fright of real tears is the only feeling you have
right before you fall asleep."

I wasn't liking it much until the last stanza which is GREAT. If we still had the star thingy I'd give you five just because of the last stanza!
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.
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