Young Writers Society

wow...so is this what happens when you write a poem a day?,lol perhaps i should start doing this...i don't know what to say other than i really enjoyed this mostly because of the first line( ) and the you used one of my favorite words: conglomeration (please, don't ask)

Very good, one of the bests ones I have read from you.

My only critique is the fourth stanza, where some of the enjambement seems a little messed up, and that could be done better, I think.

EDIT: Well, you changed it, and I like it now. Good job.

aha, mr. regressing has written a good poem!!!

meant to give you harsh, over the top critique...but no, can't find any. *insert four letter word here*

I love the image at the end, the green eyes and the tilted baseball cap...very ahh poem.

Well done. Looks like our Brad is back.

I'm replying to this poem after reading the other two as well, and I have to say I'm stunned. These are all incredible. I don't really know what else to say. I can take a closer look later, but these are fabulous examples of surrealist stream-of-conciousness poetry. I haven't written anything this good in ages. Kudos.

truely amazing as every, I wished my thoughts could flow into a poem as well as yours. Your recent poems haven't failed you yet!
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