When I’m reading over my rough drafts of my stories (or just my old stories), I often catch some very badly worded and very funny sentences. Here’s just a few of them:
With an evil smirk, he smirked.
The thoughts circled my head like a pack of starving sharks
(I actually kept this one in the final story)She could feel anger boiling inside her like a lava lake on a hot summer’s day
So tell me, YWSers, what’s the best worst line you’ve written?
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