Evanidus Puer (The Disappearing Boy)

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Old, icky, unedited post- begone!
Last edited by Sam on Tue Jul 25, 2006 6:38 am, edited 1 time in total.
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I did a read over, and this seems like just my type of thang. So I am adding it to my list, to indepth it later. :D I love the dialogue, made me laugh.

Ciao, CL.
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[Diefenbaker whines]
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Like Cl, I thoroughly enjoyed myself. The dialogue was neat and furthernore Father Thompson was entertaining. Would a Priest really behave like that? Just curious. ;) Besides, a tabacco-spitting Priest is loads of fun. I'm surprised he wasn't using snuff too, lol.

This was was my favorite part:
He reached into his mouth with his forefinger, pulled out a small wad of tobacco, and wiped it on his clerical robes. Oh, dear God. So that’s what that was, I thought.


Well, actually, I liked this too:
I descended the narrow staircase up to the women’s pews, and took a seat next to a window, feeling satisfied. I had just heard a grown man say the word ‘whore’. Twice.


When I'm not seeing stars, I'll try and come back to this, and critique it but for now, I hope you like the review. :)
The sadness drains through me rather than skating over my skin. It travels through every cell to reach the ground. I filter it yet strangely enough, I keep what was pure and it is the dirt that leaves.




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Thank you guys for getting it so quickly!

By the way- if anyone can think up a good priest name, do tell me. I've just realized 'Father Thompson' is the name of my priest...:P

Fishr- I shall get to BFG immediately! And by immediately I mean now, since I've been putting it off for so long. :wink:
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By the way- if anyone can think up a good priest name, do tell me. I've just realized 'Father Thompson' is the name of my priest...


Some names I thought of:
Father Canon
Father Dannon
Father Elliot
Father Godfrey
Father Jayden

Well, there's a few anyway. I'm probably not the best person to ask, since I like the unusual. Still, I do like the original name a lot. Besides, if it's your priest's name, then he should be prettyy happy. He's in your story! :D

Edit, and thank you! :)
The sadness drains through me rather than skating over my skin. It travels through every cell to reach the ground. I filter it yet strangely enough, I keep what was pure and it is the dirt that leaves.



Owning our story can be hard but not nearly as difficult as spending our lives running from it. Embracing our vulnerabilities is risky but not nearly as dangerous as giving up on love and belonging and joy—the experiences that make us the most vulnerable. Only when we are brave enough to explore the darkness will we discover the infinite power of our light.
— Brené Brown