Young Writers Society

I'm very intreged now with your story. Keep up the good work.

Some questions:

Was the dad a teacher? Or just a tutor?

Is Mark older than her? How much older?

Just a little of things I'd like to know... and maybe others too! Thanks!

The character development in here was excellent, I actually kinda like these people! XD So good job with that. I felt like your beginning was very interesting and attention grabbing. Your style is unusual but unique and that's very important in today's writers. I can't wait to see how Vampires are incorporated into this, something about the theme of immortality, of Forever, seems lighthearted and sinister at the same time in this story. You've set up an excellent mood here, and developed a setting that seems ordinary but has things lurking beneath the surface. All in all, very cool story