I think it was great. Your description is very good, and the story is interesting. I think i spotted a few typos, but it could just be me.
{rubs eyes to get rid of the sleep clouding them}
My life is a broken stair
Winding down a ruined tower
and leading no where
You know that place between sleep and awake, that place where you still remember dreaming? That’s where I’ll always love you. That’s where I’ll be waiting. — J.M. Barrie, Peter Pan
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