Hourglass...oh my gosh read...

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Can you please tell me in what order the Hourglass stories are sopposed to be in?????
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Hourglass
Hourglass-No prior reading require
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I really enjoyed reading this, very descriptive. I really like the way you did this at the end:

"so

very

nice..."

It sort of shows how their driffting off.

But you told me to critque so here it is:
I know this sound weird but it was almost like you put to MUCH description in some parts but that was O.K

This is the best Hourglass that you've posted so far!!! I love it!!! post more!!! write more!!!!
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WHEE!!!

sorry. ha ha.

But what parts did you think were too descriptive?
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Tis very good. The only problem is that after someone speaks you take a new line!




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The same person is talking. :D That's why.
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I think it was great. Your description is very good, and the story is interesting. I think i spotted a few typos, but it could just be me.
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