It's awesome(and it made me realize what the "possible aspect" thing meant in the character thing, so i had to go back and edit it)! I really liked it! i just wanted to mention at the end, you said Dex saw five teens, but only four got there before him... okay, that's it the rest is PURRFECT!
Apologies for the lateness, RL stuff has been getting me down and I've not been able to give YWS the attention it deserves I might have to withdraw from the SB unfortunately.
It suddenly struck me that that tiny pea, pretty and blue, was the Earth. I put up my thumb and shut one eye, and my thumb blotted out the planet Earth. I didn't feel like a giant. I felt very, very small. — Neil Armstrong
I might have to withdraw from the SB unfortunately.
