It's awesome(and it made me realize what the "possible aspect" thing meant in the character thing, so i had to go back and edit it)! I really liked it! i just wanted to mention at the end, you said Dex saw five teens, but only four got there before him... okay, that's it the rest is PURRFECT!
Apologies for the lateness, RL stuff has been getting me down and I've not been able to give YWS the attention it deserves I might have to withdraw from the SB unfortunately.
Twenty years from now you will be more disappointed by the things you didn't do than by the ones you did. So throw off the bowlines, sail away from the safe harbor. Catch the trade winds in your sails. Explore. Dream. — Mark Twain
I might have to withdraw from the SB unfortunately.
