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Fri Oct 29, 2010 2:09 am
jennyr says...



Hey! You're so nice for doing this.

Could you take a look at my novella? I'd greatly appreciate feedback. The first chapter is a little choppy, flow-wise, but after that it smoothes out.

Title: Captive
Genre: Historical/Romance
Summary: In the cold, isolated forests of 16th-century Europe, a lord takes a boy prisoner. As an unexpectedly tender relationship develops between captor and captive, resentment and distrust grow into warmth and trust in a pair of hearts that were once achingly empty. It aims to be a sensitive portrayal of a tender, if fragile, relationship that grows between two characters because of mutual loneliness as well as an intense longing for companionship. As a tentative trust develops between the two characters, the dynamics of their captor-captive relationship continually change as power is given, taken, and shared. As their bond deepens, the boy finds a new kind of freedom in his captivity and the man finds redemption for a brutal crime he committed.

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Fri Oct 29, 2010 2:17 am
Idraax says...



You put it under romance. I'm sorry, but it's one of the things I won't review. It's not one of my favorite genres, so I won't read anything that's focused on romance. Sorry about that, but I did state that as one of the things I will not review. :(
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Fri Oct 29, 2010 2:20 am
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Yes, it's under Romantic Novels.

Here's the link to the first part:

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Fri Oct 29, 2010 2:24 am
jennyr says...



idraax wrote:You put it under romance. I'm sorry, but it's one of the things I won't review. It's not one of my favorite genres, so I won't read anything that's focused on romance. Sorry about that, but I did state that as one of the things I will not review. :(


Okay, that's fine. I was torn between putting it in Historical and Romance, but I put it in Romance.





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Fri Oct 29, 2010 2:26 am
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Again, I'm sorry. I'm sure someone else will be happy to review it for you. Keep looking.
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Fri Oct 29, 2010 4:12 am
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Thanx for the review Idraax!
(seeing that your names ends with 'ax' I should have known that the editing would be very thorough :wink: )
Anyway, it was very helpfull!
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Fri Oct 29, 2010 2:55 pm
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I wish the smilies worked because there's one of this little red smiley rolling around laughing, which is what I felt like doing when I read your post. I couldn't because I'm currently in the library, waiting for class to start and there's other people around. You can find the smilies here: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/posting.php?mode=smilies&f=188#.
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Sat Oct 30, 2010 2:14 am
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Anyone want a rewiew? I'm done with the requests I got. :)
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Sun Oct 31, 2010 7:47 pm
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I won't know if you want me to review anything unless you tell me! :)
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Tue Nov 02, 2010 12:01 am
SilentRain says...



Hello, you didn't say if you review poetry, but if you do, here, topic71436.html
If not, please PM me...

If you do review, this doesn't ahve a title, mind suggesting one?
Its kinda long for a poem, but, ya...

Thanks,

~Rain~
topic68479.html <---- Click here to have your poems reviewed!

Theres always a rainbow after the Rain!!!!!!!





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Tue Nov 02, 2010 5:45 pm
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Your review's done Rain. I hope it helped. Anyone have any rewiew requests. I'll rewiew anything except what I stated in my first post.
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Thu Nov 04, 2010 7:10 pm
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"Give meeeeee stuff to revieeeeeeeew." *Walks around like a zombie, looking for reviews* :D
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Fri Nov 05, 2010 9:40 am
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but idraax...you said you would read mine XD
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Fri Nov 05, 2010 1:23 pm
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I said I'd read it this weekend.:) Are you officially requesting a review?
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Fri Nov 05, 2010 5:38 pm
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More requests people! I can't post my next chapter yet, due to a bug:(, so give me requests!
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