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Fri Dec 19, 2008 3:46 am
anti-pop says...



Hello there.

I'm Pop. If you'd like a critique from me, then please, feel free to post away.
If you're looking for something in particular, say, a review mainly focused on character development, then all you have to do is ask. Otherwise, I'll just give you an overall review including description, setting, character development, plot, originality and impression. I'll also give a review on grammar, but I don't particularly enjoy doing that (that's what the spell check is for).

Please keep in mind that I have a tendency to be a bit harsh when I review, so don't take it personally.
Normally, it just means I like what you've written and I want you to make it better.

I can only take five requests a week. If I can finish the first five before the end of the week, I will take additional requests.
However, it may be a while before I can get to your review. Unfortunately, I have a life outside of YWS and it calls upon me sometimes.

I Will Review:
Whatever you'd like.
Granted, I'm not so great with poetry (with the exception of narrative), so you may not want to offer up your lyrical or dramatic poetry. I don't mind Fan-fiction, but if I've never heard of the show/game/etc., then it'll obviously be difficult for me to follow along.
Other than that, anything is fine with me.

Please post your work with the title, genre, and link included.
If you need the review before a set date, let me know and I'll make sure I get to your request first.

Have at it!


Pop
Last edited by anti-pop on Tue Apr 14, 2009 5:27 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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changing holds
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 4:25 am
canislupis says...



Hey there!

It's your turn to rip MY story apart! Please? :)

Title: The Balcony
Genre: Other fiction (Hope that's ok, it wasn't mentioned)
Link: topic35160.html





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Fri Dec 19, 2008 4:14 pm
Night Mistress says...



can you review this for me?

topic31457.html - it the prolouge.
"I love you," she whispered in his ear, before taking his mouth with her own.

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Fri Dec 19, 2008 5:03 pm
anti-pop says...



Hey guys!

Thanks for posting. I'll get to them ASAP ;)
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changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

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Sat Dec 20, 2008 1:19 am
anti-pop says...



Lupis- done!
Mistress- working on it!
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changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

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Sat Dec 20, 2008 6:16 am
anti-pop says...



Mistress - finished!
scasha - getting to it ;)
...Bitter cold, it grows
changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

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Sat Dec 20, 2008 6:42 am
anti-pop says...



scasha - finished! Amazing work! :D
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changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

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Sat Dec 20, 2008 3:01 pm
Twit says...



post471223.html#471223

Could you review this for me, please? It's a first chapter and so needs a lot of work.
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


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Sat Dec 20, 2008 3:06 pm
Night Mistress says...



here is two more.

topic32635.html - this is chapter one.

topic32712.html - chapter 2
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 8:34 pm
anti-pop says...



TL & Mistress - I'll get to yours as soon as possible. It's snowing here so I'm having a bit of fun outside :D
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cynicism the new norm...

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Tue Dec 23, 2008 5:23 am
Mars says...



*bats eyelashes*
Genre: Other Fiction
Title: Dr./Mr. Vangerguard-Milton
Link: topic40484.html
Please, be as harsh as you need to be. Much appreciated ;-)
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Tue Dec 23, 2008 11:45 am
niccy_v says...



Chapter 1 - topic40209.htmla

Chapter 2 - topic40419.html

Only chapter 2 needs a review but if you want to do both and compare or whatever, that's fine by me. As long as you review chapter 2 i'll be happy to give you whatever you like! Review/food/nod of the head

Yeah, that's all good remember chapter 2 is what i really want haha!!!
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Wed Dec 31, 2008 8:10 pm
anti-pop says...



TL - almost done
Mistress - working on it
kissthewitch - getting to it

Thanks so much for waiting. Sorry for the long delay...holidays are so busy!
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Wed Dec 31, 2008 8:13 pm
Twit says...



topic36822.html

When you've got time and all, thank you very much. :D
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


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