Young Writers Society

Melkor, I finished your story. I took me forever, I must say. Go check it out!

~*Sara*~

You're harsh? That intrigues me.

I'd really appreciate (as in, really really appreciate) a critique of Chapter One of The Broken. =)

Feel free to rip it apart and bathe in its gory remains.

Thankee in advance.

LoveableLittleSock wrote:Melkor, I finished your story. I took me forever, I must say. Go check it out!

~*Sara*~

Yup.
and it was the best darn critique I ever had....


It wasn't that strict though...

What could I possibly have been strict about? It was fine. Go sulk in a corner and deal with it.

~*Sara*~

If you're still doing this...

Could you look at the fourth and fifth Vicissitudes story? I'm getting saddened by the lack of reviews. >_>

topic38433.html

topic38715.html

And please be harsh. Espeically with the sixth one. It's the worst one I've written, I feel...

*CoughChp.8Cough* oops

Chp. nine too?


---Jon---

Sureal, Bickazer and Wisemann, I shall get to your stories super-soon. But can everybody do me a favor and only give me one at a time? =] It takes me long enough to do one. But feel free to ask for the next one when I'm done with the first.

~*Sara*~

I knew you would be an instructor!

was i the force driving that, perhaps?


---Jon---

Thankyou

Maybeh =]

~*Sara*~

Hello there!
Do you think you could be awesome and review 'On Broken Wings,' in advanced critiques: post453828.html#453828
At your harshest, please. *cowers*

Thankyou so much, and please tell me if it's too much trouble. ^_^ You're obviously loaded down with crit requests at the moment.

Sarah
xxx

Sureal, I finished yours. Go take a look!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic39491.html

This was part of my NaNoWriMo, and I really wanted to see if it had the right mood, so I'd love a critique. Be as harsh as you need to be! I won't cry. Promise.

Hi,

Sorry, maybe the link didn't work in my post above. It was: topic39009.html

Thanks a lot!

-Sarah

LoveableLittleSock wrote:What could I possibly have been strict about? It was fine. Go sulk in a corner and deal with it.

~*Sara*~

I could think of various things...

as opposed to sulking....I'll just do my angry passionate glare....

Hi, LoveableLittleSock! *shakes hand*

Ok, so I'm officially intimidated.
Here's a short romance:
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Oh geez. I saw your HARSH example and whimpered. It's bad to start a story with dialouge?? ARGH. Ah well...
I'm mainly asking you to do this because I want to see if I have the guts to take a harsh review.
I appreciate this very much
So, *takes deep breath* do your worst. *faints*