Young Writers Society

Spark in my heart

Verse 1

Knockin’ on your bedroom window
Just so I can take a photo
You’ve gotta’ understand
That I wanna’ be your man
Please don’t reject me
Certainly don’t forget me
‘Cause…

Chorus

There’s a spark in my heart
That you always light
When I see you
It feels like
The sun’s shining inside
There’s a spark in my heart
That you always light
When I see you
It feels like
There’s a fire burnin’

Verse 2

From behind my books
I see your good looks
And I grin pathetically
Then pose authentically
That doesn’t make sense?
Well it’s you hence
I’m crazy…


Chorus


Bridge

Take a look at me
Take a look and see…
That spark in my heart
That sets light to the world
All the poor and the dying
Washed out of my mind
‘cause that’s what you do to me
Can’t you see?


Chorus


End

Knockin’ on your bedroom window
Just so I can take a photo
You’ve gotta’ understand
That I wanna’ be your man
Please don’t reject me
Certainly don’t forget me
Take a look at me
Take a look and see…

I am going to cry. I loffles you Marco!!! <3333333
I feel so happy right now. SO HAPPY.

Heheh, this is such a fun piece! Considering that it was done spontaneously and in no time at all, I'd have to say that this is quite an impressive write. It's short and has some good moments to it and has this light and free sort of language.

Sounds like she really loved it! Keep the ink flowing.

this is pretty funny and cute. I like it as a poem and I'm sure it's even better as a song. there isn't much to review, I didn't catch any mistakes and it flowed well. I don't quite get your rhyme scheme, but it sounds good as it is anyway. So, yeah, I know this isn't a good review. But while this isn't an amazing deep thought provoking poem, it is a cute romantic song. So, again, great job!