Young Writers Society

A parody I wrote of Alicia Keys' "Empire State of Mind". I'm going to Florida next Sunday for the fifth time, and I'm very excited, so that's where this idea came from!


Ooohh Florida x2

Vacation in a place that’s famous as the land of childhood dreams
Noise is always loud, there is laughter all around and the fun is clean
How I love it here, really there ain’t anywhere that could compare
Stuff my face, see sights, or just laze by the pool, chill out every day

Even if it ain’t all it seems, I got a pocketful of dreams
Baby, I'm in Florida
Sunshine state is the place I dream of
There's nothing you can't do
Now you're in Florida
Theme parks will make you feel brand new
Big rides will excite you
Hear it for Florida, Florida, Florida!

In Orlando, they’ve got everything you need, choosing is so hard
Eat just anything, sirloin steak at Sizzler, breakfast at IHOP
International Drive takes me down from SeaWorld to Universal Studios
Shop for designer clothes, pound to dollar exchange rate means anything goes

I'm gonna get there by any means, I got a pocketful of dreams
Baby, I'm in Florida
Sunshine state is the place I dream of
There's nothing you can't do
Now you're in Florida
Theme parks will make you feel brand new
Big rides will excite you
Hear it for Florida, Florida, Florida!

One hand in the air for the big city,
Speed boats, big dreams all looking pretty
No place in the world that can compare
Put your lighters in the air, everybody say yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah

In Florida
Sunshine state is the place I dream of
There's nothing you can't do
Now you're in Florida
Theme parks will make you feel brand new
Big rides will excite you
Now you’re in Florida!

Sunshine state is the place I dream of
There's nothing you can't do
Now you're in Florida
Theme parks will make you feel brand new
Big rides will excite you
Hear it for Florida!

...........lol now you have to come to Canada to compare our 'warm' weather

It was okay I guess. I've never been to Florida nor do I ever want to go there...except maybe to go to Disney World. You should have mentioned that florida is America's wang..lol. THat would have made the song so much more interesting. Have a great time in Florida.

Hi, Demoness here and I'll be your reviewer!

Haha, this was a funny and sweet thing and you clearly expressed your feelings for the state I've never been to Florida or any state in the USA but I'd love to go there sometime Overall this was a really great piece and even though I've got no happy memories from there, the strong and happy feelings you apparently have for it made me in a great mood. NICE!

I think you should add some commas and dots and stuff to fix it up a little though.. Otherwise!! GREAT WORK

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

Ha ha I loved this! It was pretty light and fun. It's actually a pretty good parody but I find it's not very original. It's grand for a quick read though. But I'm sure you were not aiming for an artistic masterpiece of creation anyways, so it isn't bad. I actually liked it. =]