Young Writers Society

I’m Not Sorry

Elise: To think I once admired you,
I trusted you with my life,
I looked up to you, like a sister,
But in the end you only brought me strife.
But now, after all this time,
I can look you in the eye and say,
I am strong, and I
Can finally let this friendship die,
And despite all the regret, now I can say
I’m not sorry.

Delilah: To think that I once helped you,
Defeat your darker side,
But this is the thanks I get,
Thanks to your foolish pride,

And now, after all this time,
You haven’t changed,
You’re still ungrateful, and I
Always knew that this friendship would die,
Because You’ll always be a fool, I can say
I’m not sorry.

Elise: You never apologized………..Delilah: All I ever heard was “I’m sorry”
But I did,………………………………………………….But you never meant it.
and I meant every word I said………………...And I never believed you
You’d use me………………………………………….You told everyone I used you
To get to him………………………………………….It was the other way around
But now he’s gone,………………………………...You nearly ruined my relationship with him
So no one wins……………………………………... And your deception astounds me

But now,
……………………………………………………………...But now,
After all this time,
……………………………………………………………...After I could put
I am strong,
……………………………………………………………...Your so-called display of strength behind me,
And I can finally let this friendship die
………………………………………………………………Our friendship died long ago.
And despite all the regret,
………………………………………………………………I regret nothing
Now I can say
…………………………………………………………….You’re still a fool, and
I’m not sorry………………………………………...I’m not sorry.

Well, goal achieved!

This is good stuff, and if possible can you send me an mp3 or some sort of video or something when everything is put together? I love this kind of 'passive aggresive' stuff

I do have my doubts on this part though:

Elise: You never apologized………..Delilah: All I ever heard was “I’m sorry”
But I did,………………………………………………….But you never meant it.
and I meant every word I said………………...And I never believed you
You’d use me………………………………………….You told everyone I used you
To get to him………………………………………….It was the other way around
But now he’s gone,………………………………...You nearly ruined my relationship with him
So no one wins……………………………………... And your deception astounds me

I doesn't seem like it flows together naturally, if you do want it to, it is going to sound forced I think. And to be honest I have no idea how you can solve this, or maybe I'm completely wrong of course.

I can almost imagine the two female voices singing this although I don't even have a melody haha...Good job, I was surprised to find this

Hello there. One word. Wow. This is really awesome!

Elise: You never apologized………..Delilah: All I ever heard was “I’m sorry”
But I did,………………………………………………….But you never meant it.
and I meant every word I said………………...And I never believed you
You’d use me………………………………………….You told everyone I used you
To get to him………………………………………….It was the other way around
But now he’s gone,………………………………...You nearly ruined my relationship with him
So no one wins……………………………………... And your deception astounds me

I love this part because it's like they're argueing. It doesn't flow too well though, but I think it's quite interesting. Keep up the good work and if you need anything else reviewed, just let me know and I'd be more than happy to take a look at it. Once again, this was just amazing, hope to read more about this musical!

-Angel

I liked it! I could almost hear them singing it (though you probably imagined it differently,) and it seemed to flow well.