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This is just something silly I suddenly wrote at work. I'm really bad at writing music, but I have some rocky melodies in my head when I read this. It's supposed to be a light-rock thing... something like.. Garbage, but maybe heavier (like Halestorm or The Pretty Reckless). What do you think?

He held me in a way that no one did
And suddenly I felt just what I need
Not a husband, not a lover,
But a wicked special other

CHORUS
Wicked, I need ya to be.. wicked
I crave you would be.. wicked
Forever after.. wicked
My own disaster.. wicked!

The promises he made don't mean a thing
Those silly words he said are not for real
Not a brother, not a father,
Just my wicked special other

Pretty cool! It's quite a short song O.O but I think it's good. The chorus has an okay rhythm but could be better . Other then that, good rhyming and description.

Thanks!
The song isn't really finished yet... It is short, yeah I'm thinking about expanding the verses, but I want to leave the chorus as short as it is.. How do you think I could improve the rhythm of the chorus?

This make me giggle. Have you noticed that rock songs always sound funny without the music. I'll try to imagine it with rock music! *strains* ah. Got it.

Ok. this was really cool. I like the word wicked in general. Good job!

Hey there!

I know you said that this isn't finished yet, but even so I think it's great. I love The Pretty Reckless, so I tried imagining it as one of their songs and, with Taylor growl-singing the lyrics, I think it works

I do have a suggestion though -

And suddenly I felt just what I need

I think 'need' would be better as 'needed' As it is, it reads like something is missing and with 'needed' the line feels a little more complete to me. Also, 'needed' ryhmes better with 'did' than 'need'

Great job on this and I hope you do finish it

xDudettex

He held me in a way that no one did
And suddenly I felt just what I need
Not a husband, not a lover,
But a wicked special other

CHORUS
Wicked, I need ya to be.. wicked
I crave you would be.. wicked
Forever after.. wicked
My own disaster.. wicked!

The promises he made don't mean a thing
Those silly words he said are not for real
Not a brother, not a father,
Just my wicked special other

I didn't find this to be that good. Maybe it's because of the "wicked" word being used so much. I don't have any problem with wicked being used in a song, but what makes the guy wicked? Is it the fact that it's implied he uses you for intimate encounters? I know the song isn't finished yet and perhaps you will elaborate more once it's finished.