Young Writers Society

Hiding
away in my corner,
Hiding away,
from the light.
I don't wanna fight
anymore .


Chorus

The things you
got us in to.
Almost got
us killed.
Did you stop?
Did you ever help us back up
when we fall?


No!
You just dug a bigger hole.
I guess it was just your way of sayin'
Life is just a grave in waitin'.


End chorus


Well I don't wanna think
like that.
Don't dwell on the future or the past.


Think about today!


I asked you once,
What did you
want to be
when you were my age.
Remember what you told me?


You said.
I don't have to want
Cuz' I know where I going.
Im gonna be dead.
I'm gonna be dead.


I don't wanna fight
anymore.
So I'm heading right out
the door.


Insane ,
crazy,wacky,
stupid
stunts.

Without you.
And the stuff you did.
I'll live
without you.


Chorus [1x]


I can't deal with you.
I can't be around you.
I know I'm
going to die.
Someday.
But when the time comes
I'll be ready.


Without you.
And the stuff you did.


The things you
got us in to almost got us killed
Did you ever stop to think
Maybe we're not like you?

This was good! I really enjoyed reading it.

I guess it was just your way of sayin'
Life is just a grave in waitin'.

I like these lines a lot, they show (his? her?) attitude towards life.

Your to negative.
And boring.

I think this was kinda out of place. A little random, you know? Maybe instead of saying that he's negative and boring, you could show us. Maybe something talking about why he was like that. Like an example. I don't know, it's just a suggestion.

Cool song, though!

Hello! I love lyrics and I am happy to review them. This is a neeat song. Very straight forward and clean. Not clogged with metaphors. I like that. Nitpicks:

1. Capitolize every line, whether its the beginning of a sentence or not.

2. Put "begin chorus" and "end chorus" in parenthesis or astriks. It makes them easier to see as a direction, not part of the song.

3. Little typo :

Im

I'm. Don't forget our little friend the apostrophy!

4.

Insane ,
crazy,wacky,
stupid
stunts.

This sounds odd and out of flow.

5.

Your to negative.

You're, your is posessive, you're is a conjunction of you and are. You are to negative, not you own negative.

Overall well done. Keep writing.

Great Song
I wish i could nit pick this, but lyrics are really hard to do, because you can't hear it.

I saw your profile picture though (Taylor) I <3 her as well..... In fact I got to meet her myself...... sorry of subject, great song

I felt that this was an okay song lyric and the grammer has already been spoken about so I'm not going to repeat what was already said about that.

Good job