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RE: Remembering Sunday



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Fri Apr 15, 2011 4:53 am
telle_04 says...



Spoiler! :
So Remembering Sunday is a song by my fave band, All Time Low, featuring Juliet Simms who is the vocalist of Automatic Loveletter. In here, I retained Juliet's part (the second to the last stanza) because I think it's cool. I was just passing time one afternoon and so I thought I'll make the reply. One thing about this song is that the verses are in third person POV, but the chorus is in first person POV. :)



She opened her eyes from a vision-less sleep
Stayed in bed in her clothes until ten in the morning
She's tired from crying last night

Looking down into the street
Remembering Sunday, she's with him last week
They had breakfast together
But that's not enough
To show the feeling of what she needs

There are places familiar to them
He held out his hand as they walked on the sand
She made up her mind, she made up her mind
But she knew he won't understand

[chorus]
Forgive me I'm trying to hide
He's calling, he's calling at night
I don't mean to be a bother
But have you seen this boy?
He's been running through my dreams
And it's driving me crazy, it seems
I'm gonna ask him to let go of me

Even though she doesn't believe in love
He's determined to call her beloved
Who can deny these butterflies?
They're filling his gut

Waking the neighbors, unfamiliar faces
He asked for her hand, but she made up her mind
Though she knew he won't understand

[chorus]

Without a clue I went away
'Cause there's just no reason for me to stay
I didn't think much of him then
But it's starting to all make sense
Oh I can feel now that all of his words
Are torturing me in his desperate endeavor
To find his whoever, but I know she's not me

I'm not coming back, I've done something so terrible
I'm terrified to speak but you'd expect that from me
I'm mixed up, I'll be blunt
Now the rain is just washing you out of my hair
And out of my mind, keeping an eye on the world
So many thousands of feet off the ground
I'm over you now, I'm at home in the clouds
Towering over your head

Well I guess I'll go home now
I guess I'll go home now
I guess I'll go home now
I guess I'll go home
You've got the key to my heart..but have you forgotten about a duplicate?
Sorry. I've already given it to someone else.
  





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Sat Apr 16, 2011 3:09 am
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dregymayfield says...



Hmm...It's not really that bad. I understand that the woman feels bad because, I suppose, she broke up with the guy. However, a break up isn't a terrible thing, unless the woman cheated on him. The guy however is becoming more of a stalker. So she should probably get a restraining order against him..lol

I liked the song and I really didn't see anything that need to be worked on. I don't know the band or song that you mentioned in the spoiler area, though.
  








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