Over Rivers

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I thought I would share a little something I poured emotion into. It is short, but when I sing it it makes me cry. Now, if you've read my introduction, you would know that I do not write lyrics usually and that I am not that good at it, but I like to write them, they give me a good feeling. So, even though I will never publish and record my own lyrics, I would like to share some with you guys just to get a feel of what it may sound like, if I ever perfect the art.

Over Rivers

Verse 1: On a one way street, through the straits of our world, one voice calls my name.
It calls to me with the sweetness of honey, and with the power of a sword.
One might say I’m crazy, and a little obscene, but I think I know just what I mean.

Chorus: Because that voice is you, calling to me. And that voice is you, that is calling to me. Through mountains, under canyons, in the storm, over rivers, I hear your name.

Verse 2: Through the death of a family, or the sorrow of a war. No one can soften my love for you. And that feeling you get, when the sun has just set, you hear me and I hear you. Well, one might say that I don’t know, and maybe I have no clue. But, when I hear you, through the chaos of life, I can hear your voice over all.

Chorus: (1 Time)

Verse 3: On that little white house, in which you dream so fair, I can sense you calling my name. And that is true so much, that you can feel it too, I am here always with you. Even though we’re far away, I can still hear you calling my name. I can say this much, after much thought, I will always love you the best. Even better than the rest.

Chorus: (2 Times)

Coda: So the next time you’re out. Think of this song. How all of the things that are wrong in the world, come to an end. And for a short period of time, you can hear a call. Your own voice returning, at last.




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I like it, it's very deep and emotional, especially for someone who doesn't usually write lyrics.




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Hello, welcome to YWS! :)


I really like this. Usually song lyrics don't really mean anything these days, but here just your words are beautiful. You don't have to depend on whatever beat you choose. I wish I could hear what this sounds like. I love it when people really writing about something meaningful, I could tell that you put feeling into this.

PM me if you have any questions or need help with anything!
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Owning our story can be hard but not nearly as difficult as spending our lives running from it. Embracing our vulnerabilities is risky but not nearly as dangerous as giving up on love and belonging and joy—the experiences that make us the most vulnerable. Only when we are brave enough to explore the darkness will we discover the infinite power of our light.
— Brené Brown