I'm just going to post all of my poems for NaPoWriMo in this thread. However, critique them hard and die ;] Comments are welcome, though...of course. My creativity is not exactly at it's highest right now. But, forcing it anyway!
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#1. Odo Nnyew Fie Kwan Frame
Three years.
On a silver bird he flew away,
far from his home; from us.
His individuality disguised,
blended in a sea of green.
No longer a face.
Eleven months.
A love for the job;
what does that mean?
Did I have to love it, too?
Do you still love it?
Where are you?
We can't see your brown eyes,
your cherry lips;
only the green.
Thirty days.
So long has passed,
it is time.
The same silver bird
will fly him home to us.
We will not see his brown eyes,
his cherry lips.
The green is gone now;
replaced by tear blue.
He is lost now;
yet his identity regained.
We must live
on memories of you.
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