'Finding a way to adjust' - brilliant opening line - but (maybe I am not paying enough attention, but...) I did not understand the significance of the title. The first few lines are fine; but I think 'It gurgled' sort of ruins that 'swishy watery' effect you have created from the lines above. 'Gurgled' is a hard sounding word; it looks out of place. I did not care for the way this was written:
but it made my hand clean
and did not burn my skin,
and maybe it's alright.
I think you can be a lot more subtle about your 'message' than this! Leave something for the reader to figure out, for them to decode; a little mystery, a piece of a puzzle. I love the 'I was in snow/with the whole shower raining down' part and I think this should be more toward the start of the stanza to surprise us, and then say something about the whole bottle of bubbles. Well done!
'The Marketplace' was likewise a dainty poem; a single, innocent idea skipping in the simple - but not, by any means simplistic - lines. Have a think about rephrasing the last couple of lines so they are less direct - they ask a very interesting question, but for me they sort of broke the tone of the rest of the poem. But I loved it nevertheless
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