This is a pilot for a book I've started on, so feel free to give me feedback on whether or not I should continue.
Based on a true story:
The Hate List
Blurb: Going back to middle school after the summer break is an easy task to handle for Lauren Pitt. Last year in sixth grade she was one of the most popular girls, she had great friends, but better yet there was no drama between anyone she knew.
However, little does she realize that everything is going change when she enters the school hall on her first day of seventh grade.
Pilot: Lauren sucks in a deep breath, staring up at the large silver and blue sign above her school's double doors that read, "Southwest Middle: Teaching the Futures of Tomorrow". She stands just outside of those metal doors, the August breeze whipping some of her blond hair onto her face. Nervously, she readjusts her bobby pinned ponytail before moving closer to the school's entrance. Lauren tightly grips her purse and the pink straps of her backpack in her left hand, so she can have a free one to smooth out her short skirt.
This is it, the girl thinks to herself, lifting the pink polka dotted bag onto her back. This is the beginning of a great school year!
She reaches for the large door handle and pulls it open with ease, strolling into the bright building. Despite a slight feeling of anxiety, she beams a fresh smile. Cool air conditioning hits Lauren in all directions as she allows the metal door she entered through to slam behind her.
The large front lobby of Southwest Middle is packed with kids, varying in ages, all milling around. Different tables are positioned against the walls each bearing a sign like, "Volleyball tryout forms here!"
Lauren searches the large crowd for any close friends.
"Hey, Pitt!"
When the seventh grader hears her name over all the talking, she immediately spots Meredith and Jade calling to her next to the cheerleading booth, earning giant grins from both of them. She waves at her friends and rushes over toward them excitedly.
"Meredith! Jade!" Lauren squeals, dropping her purse on the tiled floor before
hugging each of the girls. They let go of each other still beaming smiles.
"This is definitely going to be an awesome year, y'all!" Jade says while helping Lauren pick up her purse.
Meredith responds loudly on top of the noise around them, "Yes it will be! I heard there's a new related arts class they're considering."
"Don't tell me they want to put in our idea!" Lauren exclaims.
"Yes! The school board is actually talking about our fashion and design class!" Meredith replies, her excitement building even higher. The trio squeals and passes hugs around again.
Raising an imaginary glass, Jade states in her southern accent, "Cheers to a great year at Southwest!"
"Cheers!" the two other girls reply.
What they didn't know, though is that this will be one of the worst years of their lives. That is, if they can act before the creation of the Hate List.
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